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Heh, I don't claim to be an art expert, but if anyone wants a constructive comment, share it here and I'll try to help you best I can!

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Slug Girl by Spazer86

Spinning Bird Kick by Spazer86

Curvy Gal6 Final by Spazer86

The In-Laws“What were you thinking!?” Andy heard his mother scream at his father-in-law. Oh, no…
Zeus regarded Samantha with mild amusement. “I was thinking doves were so mundane. My mortal daughter is only going to have one wedding,” (Andy felt a flash of lightning come from the glance Zeus gave him. Warning received!) “and it’s going to be the wedding of the twenty-first century. This wedding will be the stuff of legend!”
Andy picked himself up off the ground and surveyed the damage to the ballroom. His bride was hacking at a wayward tentacle which had refused to follow the rest of the body back into the Pit from Whence It Came. (Thankfully, the satyrs had sewn her wedding dress out of indestructible fabric, and adorned it with golden chainmail. A run through a washing machine would clear out the slime and it would be as good as new.) Not a single table was still standing; those that had not been wrecked had been overturned by Andy’s family

I'm a little reluctant to critique it due to the sexual nature of it, sorry.

Hopefully someone else can help you, good luck!

How about something nonsexual, then?

The GroanerThe two clowns peered around the corner, at the boarded-up carriage. Faded, flaking paint revealed dry timber in the cart’s construction, but the iron framework looked secure enough. It had been a long time since anyone had dared to put any maintenance into the transport for the circus’s secret shame. For once, it was not rocking. Whatever lay inside was either eating, or asleep.
“So what do you think is in there?” Franco the Funny asked.
“Dunno,” said Blondzo. “But considering they have to get Strongman Sam to feed it, probably nothing I want to get too close to.”
“Come on, where’s your sense of adventure?” Franco asked.
“What makes you think I have one?”
“You ran away to join the circus.”
Franco had him there.
“Legend has it that it used to be our bearded lady. One day, she accidentally sat on the fortune teller, and the gypsy used her last breath to put a curse on her.”
Blondzo roll

MekaShadowlight

Edited Aug 20, 2014

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how about lit?

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heres one you can critique

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