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I'm offering no-strings-attached, constructive feedback on your favorite/newest/best whatever piece you want to show me! I'd especially love to see some digital art, since that's my own specialty.

Post a link or a thumb, and I'll comment directly on your page, rather than replying with feedback here.

If for some reason I'm not comfortable with the piece you suggested, I'll let you know so you can suggest another one!

I'll happily comment with any constructive feedback, but if there's something in particular you'd like me to comment on, please let me know. [For example, shading, lighting, anatomy, etc.]

And if you'd like to peek at my gallery, I always love visitors! :wave:
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Hottie 3: The Best Fan Fic in the World, Ch. 1
One night in Beverly Hills in the Hottie-verse, a cat burglar breaks into someone's house and steals a TV. He would have gotten away if it weren't for a certain fire starter. Her name was name Allison Cole, but she was also known as the superheroine "Hottie". She had to power to shoot fire from her fingertips and shot a blast of fire at the burglar's feet. The burglar was about to pull out his gun when all of a sudden, out of nowhere, he is grabbed by a giant red robot with sunglasses on it's chest. It was Gurren Lagann co-piloted by Simon, leader of Team Dai-Gurren, and Viral. Long after the burglar is arrested, Simon explains to Hottie that
Hottie 3: The Best Fan Fic in the World, Ch. 2
A new Dept. of Hotness has been formed, ready to combat G.O.S.E. throughout the Multiverse. Hottie herself has changed her superhero style, looking like she did on the cover of the first Hottie book with only two differences, she wears triangle shades given to her by Simon that belonged to the late Kamina and attached to her belt was a sheath with a sword, Nothung, in it that was given to her by Finn that originally belonged to the late Billy, it turns out the sword could change size to the wielder, also around her neck was a Core Drill which she could pilot her own Lagann. Our heroes arrive at the Baman Piderman-verse to stop G.O.S.E from co
Hottie 3: The Best Fan Fic in the World, Ch. 3
The Dept. of Hotness' next stop on their multiversal quest is the Channel Awesome Universe, but it is soon invaded by the Guild of Super Evil. An army of Trashtors is being led by Dr. Insano. Linkara then transforms into Zeo Linkara, he is later joined by the Ohrangers. Linkara and the Ohrangers then fight off a bunch of Trashtors. Dr. Insano reveals that the Guild's emperor want to take the Plot Hole for himself so that he will become all powerful. Chuck Norris then decides to activate his gunman "Grapearl Mk-II". Hottie, with her Lagann, combines with the Grapearl Mk-II to form "Grapearl Lagann". Dr. Linsano then transports back to the Impe
Department of Hotness Unlimited==Founding members==
* Hottie: Leader of the Department of Hotness. Her secret identity is Alison Cole and her superpower is pyrokinesis
* David Eels: Hottie's sidekick
* Designated Dean: Driver of the Hottiemobile
* Kellyn Levy: One of Alison's friends
* Dorinda Galen: Another one of Alison's friends

==Expanded Dept. of Hotness members==
* Fear Squad (Monster High)
* Scott Pilgrim
* Agent Xero (The Modifyers)
* Tack (The Thief and the Cobbler)
* Little Nemo (Little Nemo: Adventures in Slumberland)
* Willow (A Kind of Magic)
* Crescendolls (Interstella 5555)
* Team Dai-Gurren (Gurren Lagann)
* Gumball Watterson (The Amazing World of Gumball)
Guild of Super Evil==Leaders==
* Emperor Vakudos: The leader of G.O.S.E., conqueror of over 150 alternate Earths and ruler of a dimension called the Midnight Cage. He resembles a cross between Lord Vyce from Atop the 4th Wall and Akudos Gill from Kaizoku Sentai Gokaiger

* Carmen St. Cloud: The main villain of the 1st Hottie book, Alison Cole's former step mother and 2nd-in-command of the G.O.S.E. Was rebuilt into a cyborg after being killed in the 1st book. She is also known by her supervillain name "Wettie"

==Major Members==
* Nightmare King (Little Nemo: Adventures in Slumberland)
* Mighty One-Eye (The Thief and the Cobbler)
* Earl de Darkwood (Interstella
astarayel's avatar
I'm actually working on a different forum now: [link]

Please submit your art there, and I'll be happy to comment!
Kuja09's avatar
Ok, thx for the info, already posted it :D
DonVoltonus's avatar

and my first digital work (Would love some feedback on this.)
astarayel's avatar
I'm actually working on a different forum now: [link]

Please submit your art there, and I'll be happy to comment!
DonVoltonus's avatar
Seems I already did at some point.
astarayel's avatar
All right, then! We'll be sure to get you a comment soon :)
astarayel's avatar
I'm actually working on a different forum now: [link]

Please submit your art there, and I'll be happy to comment!
PonderHope's avatar
I posted some stuff there
astarayel's avatar
Done! Thanks for sharing :)
astarayel's avatar
I'm actually working on a new forum, here: [link]

Would you be able to submit your piece there? Working two forums at once is a bit difficult ;)

Sorry for the inconvenience!
astarayel's avatar
I'm actually working on a new forum, here: [link]

Would you be able to submit your piece there? Working two forums at once is a bit difficult ;)

Sorry for the inconvenience!
ForeverSoaring's avatar
It's so nice of you to offer critiques!
saescavipica's avatar


3D Architectural Rendering
3DsMax+Vray+Ps
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Thank you very kindly for looking. :peace::thanks:
astarayel's avatar
Sure! I'm actually working on a new forum, here: [link]

Would you be able to submit your piece there? Working two forums at once is a bit difficult ;)

Sorry for the inconvenience!
Nonamenonamenonamepl's avatar
Okay, forget the last post. I just want a critique of my Fairly Oddparents fanfic Finale:

[link]