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Constructive Feedback Extravangaza

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astarayel Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013
I'm offering no-strings-attached, constructive feedback on your favorite/newest/best whatever piece you want to show me! I'd especially love to see some digital art, since that's my own specialty.

Post a link or a thumb, and I'll comment directly on your page, rather than replying with feedback here.

If for some reason I'm not comfortable with the piece you suggested, I'll let you know so you can suggest another one!

I'll happily comment with any constructive feedback, but if there's something in particular you'd like me to comment on, please let me know. [For example, shading, lighting, anatomy, etc.]

And if you'd like to peek at my gallery, I always love visitors! :wave:
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Alaxr274 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hottie 3: The Best Fan Fic in the World, Ch. 1
One night in Beverly Hills in the Hottie-verse, a cat burglar breaks into someone's house and steals a TV. He would have gotten away if it weren't for a certain fire starter. Her name was name Allison Cole, but she was also known as the superheroine "Hottie". She had to power to shoot fire from her fingertips and shot a blast of fire at the burglar's feet. The burglar was about to pull out his gun when all of a sudden, out of nowhere, he is grabbed by a giant red robot with sunglasses on it's chest. It was Gurren Lagann co-piloted by Simon, leader of Team Dai-Gurren, and Viral. Long after the burglar is arrested, Simon explains to Hottie that
Hottie 3: The Best Fan Fic in the World, Ch. 2
A new Dept. of Hotness has been formed, ready to combat G.O.S.E. throughout the Multiverse. Hottie herself has changed her superhero style, looking like she did on the cover of the first Hottie book with only two differences, she wears triangle shades given to her by Simon that belonged to the late Kamina and attached to her belt was a sheath with a sword, Nothung, in it that was given to her by Finn that originally belonged to the late Billy, it turns out the sword could change size to the wielder, also around her neck was a Core Drill which she could pilot her own Lagann. Our heroes arrive at the Baman Piderman-verse to stop G.O.S.E from co
Hottie 3: The Best Fan Fic in the World, Ch. 3
The Dept. of Hotness' next stop on their multiversal quest is the Channel Awesome Universe, but it is soon invaded by the Guild of Super Evil. An army of Trashtors is being led by Dr. Insano. Linkara then transforms into Zeo Linkara, he is later joined by the Ohrangers. Linkara and the Ohrangers then fight off a bunch of Trashtors. Dr. Insano reveals that the Guild's emperor want to take the Plot Hole for himself so that he will become all powerful. Chuck Norris then decides to activate his gunman "Grapearl Mk-II". Hottie, with her Lagann, combines with the Grapearl Mk-II to form "Grapearl Lagann". Dr. Linsano then transports back to the Impe
Department of Hotness Unlimited==Founding members==
* Hottie: Leader of the Department of Hotness. Her secret identity is Alison Cole and her superpower is pyrokinesis
* David Eels: Hottie's sidekick
* Designated Dean: Driver of the Hottiemobile
* Kellyn Levy: One of Alison's friends
* Dorinda Galen: Another one of Alison's friends

==Expanded Dept. of Hotness members==
* Fear Squad (Monster High)
* Scott Pilgrim
* Agent Xero (The Modifyers)
* Tack (The Thief and the Cobbler)
* Little Nemo (Little Nemo: Adventures in Slumberland)
* Willow (A Kind of Magic)
* Crescendolls (Interstella 5555)
* Team Dai-Gurren (Gurren Lagann)
* Gumball Watterson (The Amazing World of Gumball)
Guild of Super Evil==Leaders==
* Emperor Vakudos: The leader of G.O.S.E., conqueror of over 150 alternate Earths and ruler of a dimension called the Midnight Cage. He resembles a cross between Lord Vyce from Atop the 4th Wall and Akudos Gill from Kaizoku Sentai Gokaiger

* Carmen St. Cloud: The main villain of the 1st Hottie book, Alison Cole's former step mother and 2nd-in-command of the G.O.S.E. Was rebuilt into a cyborg after being killed in the 1st book. She is also known by her supervillain name "Wettie"

==Major Members==
* Nightmare King (Little Nemo: Adventures in Slumberland)
* Mighty One-Eye (The Thief and the Cobbler)
* Earl de Darkwood (Interstella
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Kuja09 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
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:iconastarayel:
astarayel Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
I'm actually working on a different forum now: [link]

Please submit your art there, and I'll be happy to comment!
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Kuja09 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ok, thx for the info, already posted it :D
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DonVoltonus Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist

and my first digital work (Would love some feedback on this.)
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:iconastarayel:
astarayel Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
I'm actually working on a different forum now: [link]

Please submit your art there, and I'll be happy to comment!
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DonVoltonus Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Seems I already did at some point.
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astarayel Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
All right, then! We'll be sure to get you a comment soon :)
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DonVoltonus Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Thanks!
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PonderHope Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Student General Artist
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:iconastarayel:
astarayel Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
I'm actually working on a different forum now: [link]

Please submit your art there, and I'll be happy to comment!
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PonderHope Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Student General Artist
I posted some stuff there
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Serpiente-Solida Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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astarayel Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
Done! Thanks for sharing :)
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DarthCraftus Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
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:iconastarayel:
astarayel Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
I'm actually working on a new forum, here: [link]

Would you be able to submit your piece there? Working two forums at once is a bit difficult ;)

Sorry for the inconvenience!
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josegoncalo Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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:iconastarayel:
astarayel Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
I'm actually working on a new forum, here: [link]

Would you be able to submit your piece there? Working two forums at once is a bit difficult ;)

Sorry for the inconvenience!
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ForeverSoaring Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It's so nice of you to offer critiques!
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saescavipica Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013


3D Architectural Rendering
3DsMax+Vray+Ps
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billy-pilgrim Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Student General Artist


Thank you very kindly for looking. :peace::thanks:
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:iconastarayel:
astarayel Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
Sure! I'm actually working on a new forum, here: [link]

Would you be able to submit your piece there? Working two forums at once is a bit difficult ;)

Sorry for the inconvenience!
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illastrat Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
new work
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:iconnonamenonamenonamepl:
Nonamenonamenonamepl Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013
Okay, forget the last post. I just want a critique of my Fairly Oddparents fanfic Finale:

[link]
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:iconastarayel:
astarayel Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013
Sorry, but I don't critique literature; I should have mentioned that in the description.

I would also recommend asking for critiques on a single chapter, rather than an entire fanfic. Unless of course you're on a site dedicated to fanfiction, in which case readers can review each chapter with proper care!
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mikimikimchi Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Professional General Artist
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astarayel Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
Done! Thanks for sharing :)
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JollyGolightly Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist

:blush:
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:iconastarayel:
astarayel Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
I'm actually working on a new forum, here: [link]

Would you be able to submit your piece there? Working two forums at once is a bit difficult ;)

Sorry for the inconvenience!
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JollyGolightly Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
sure! no problem :)
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:iconastarayel:
astarayel Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013
I'm actually no good with poetry, but I'm collaborating on a forum with =Riemea and she is critiquing poetry! You can find it here! Hope to see you over there :)
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Amarrabae13 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
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:iconastarayel:
astarayel Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
I'm actually working on a new forum, here: [link]

Would you be able to submit your piece there? Working two forums at once is a bit difficult ;)

Sorry for the inconvenience!
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Nonamenonamenonamepl Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013
[link]

Don't just say "Great story!" or "This is awesome!". And don't simply favorite it, either. I want you to pour out your feelings and elaborate. What did you like and dislike? Is there anything that could've been improved, done differently, etc.? Should I change anything? Should I keep anything the same? Did I overlook a detail or two? Be like Roger Ebert and treat me as they do any director, writer, or executive of their choice.
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:iconastarayel:
astarayel Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013
I'm actually no good with poetry, but I'm collaborating on a forum with =Riemea and she is critiquing poetry! You can find it here! Hope to see you over there :)
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diddleh Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist

You have an awesome gallery by the way :)
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astarayel Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013
Thanks!

Done! Thanks for sharing :)
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Rockyon Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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astarayel Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013
Done! Thanks for sharing :)
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Dei-bon Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Student Filmographer
Hi! It's great that you're offering to give advice for free :huggle:

Umm so yeah I wanted to ask this. You see in my thumb below, my arms sort of blend in with my body because they're the same value and colour :\
I tried separating them using some subtle rim lighting but it only worked to a certain extent. How do you think I should have done it? Thanks in advance! Really appreciate it :D

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astarayel Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013
Done! Thanks for sharing :)
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Dei-bon Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Student Filmographer
Thank you :)
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astarayel Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013
You're welcome!
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Spork- Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I just started work on adoptables, normally I just work on anatomy :3 I would love to know what you think and please include anything about pricing/quality.
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astarayel Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013
Done! Thanks for sharing :)
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The-Pink-Pirate Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Student Filmographer
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astarayel Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013
Done! Thanks for sharing :)
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The-Pink-Pirate Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Student Filmographer
Thanks a lot :D
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