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Comment on my 3 and I wil comment on your 5!!!

Lets play a comment for a comment game~! XD

MY TURN:
These are my three:

Please give me what you like and what I could improve all, all feedback will be greatly appreciated~!

NOW ITS YOUR TURN:
- Comment on the three works
- Post up to 5 works, and I will comment but, not till you comment on mine
I look forward to seeing all your lovely works~!

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SubmissionIt's not about getting lost in the news.
It's not about the lives they used.
I could be your savior if I
Can put this world to sleep.

Light the fuse inside my cold judgment.
Burn me down to the wonderful mind,
Here I am.

We're all frogs hopping off the big bus
In a world that keeps rusting.
We sell things, we are in submission.
We sell things, we are in submission.

It's not about the dark 'n alley ways.
It's not about the steamed factory days.
I could be your savior if I
Can please you in a back seat.

Light the fuse inside my tired brain
Burn me down to the wonderful life,
Here I am.

We're all frogs hopping off the big bus
In a world

Waiting For the SunCalm salt-water blinks
into a tidal wave; sinks
with the lunar night.

Empty FriendsEmpty friends are trying to tear off my face
Thought black cords were trying to phone my place
Take me away from your time, they said
Ringing voices that are telling me I'm dead
Empty friends will dream until I sleep

I told you not to push me
I told you not to save me
But now I'm on a bullet train
(I'm going down)
I told you not to push me
I told you not to save me
But now I'm on a bullet train
And I'm going down

Empty friends are furious as the sea
Made rivers undertake my eyes in three (two one..)
I've met you beneath the burning skies
Empty friends are making me swim and defy
Raging sails cut by water so

I'll only give you three since they're written works. (:

those please!!!

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Thank you so so much. So sorry for the late replies....

I appreciate the comments greatly

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I really like your works, but u can always improve it !!! (even the masters of art can improve their work)

I'll let only 3.. I will appreciate any comments and feedback. Thanks!

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thx for ur comments

I really appreciate it

You are welcome

eclectic-fusion

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commented ^_^

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thank you so much!

KatherineReedKS

Commenting now!

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PictureOnProgress

Already commented on your 3

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Commented + critiqued.

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Thank you!

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madre-superiora

but this ones I've commented, new stuff please, if you want to play with 'old players'