I paint in oils not watercolor, so take this with a grain of salt, Your composition is really nice and effective, the pallet is strong, as is the rendering of the face. But if your looking for input on how to improve, here it goes. The shades of yellow and ocher in the earphones is a bit of an orphan and distracts the eye, becoming a visual anchor. Having the music notes move across the canvas works well, if they were painted in a neater manner (more like calligraphy) they would be stronger.

Hope this helps, I really like the piece

hey, I hope that I dont come off as a jerk with this post, because I love your enthusiasm. Here are some ways you could improve, since you are asking. 1) I can see some timidness in some of your brushwork. Draw, draw, draw, draw all day long, all night long. It improves your painting, and makes your stokes more confident. 2) This is more of a composition and content issue. The music notes are a nice idea, but too literal. The headphones imply that she is listening to music already, the music notes are redundant. If you are trying to portray an emotion, you can do it with your subject, your colors, your lines, and the rest of the elements and principles of composition. 3) Dont listen to me and do whatever you want. I know youre young, and if youve got the passion, just do it and dont worry about what people like me think. Have a great day, and good luck!

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THANKS. i'll take that in my mind forever. gah, why haven't i noticed that redundancy before?</sub>

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yeah. since im not using oil, the paint of the notes kinda mixed with the blueness of it all not it was hard to make it stand out.

and yeah, the earphones were quite a disaster ahaha thank you for pointing that out because i totally agree</sub>

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hey. Well I think you did a pretty good job. I'm interested that you find it easier working on canvas board with watercolour? I personally find good quality thick cartridge paper lovely to work on with watercolours. I've tried canvas board but the canvas grain is difficult to achieve a nice wash over. So if I were you I would have a go at this again on paper. stretch it first though. You do that by soaking the paper onto a board, sticking down the edges with gummed brown paper tape, and then letting it dry out before starting. Then tackle the image. And you seem to have got some great advice from others on the painting side of things, so I'll leave it there.

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I love the colors you used on the woman, however I have to agree that the music notes kind of distracted me, although I personally thought the headphones were a rather striking contrast (in a good way). i suppose it all just depends on what your focus of the picture was etc. the mouth didn't quite fit the rest of the piece, I wish it had been a bit more expressive? That said, even with the critique, it is a beautiful piece. Keep up the good work!

<sub>i knew something was distracting! tsk! again, with all other similar comments i agree with you. it was either the headphones or the notes that makes it kind of confusing in terms of subject.

aw, thanks, for real! i'll see this as an advantage of having constructive criticism.</sub>

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<sub>this is my first encounter on a whole new process on paper. so far i've only handled paper in my sketch pads but i think i'll give this a try.

thanks for orienting me with a new kind of style. i envy you people who really know much.</sub>

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No probs. I hope you enjoy what you discover. Oh and the envy bit will disappear gradually as you keep asking more and more questions...

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