Challenge Fun #13 - Win 3 Month PM or Points!


3wyl's avatar
Your challenge for this week is inspired by 'This Is Just To Say' by William Carlos Williams:

I have eaten
the plums
that were in
the icebox

and which
you were probably
saving
for breakfast

Forgive me
they were delicious
so sweet
and so cold



Please fill in the gaps to the below piece! The person who comes up with the best one wins a 3 Month Premium Membership or 636 :points:

One poem/post only, and please make it coherent.


I have ________
________
that were ________
________

and which
you were probably
________
________

Forgive me
they were ________
so ________
and so ________


Deadline: Monday 28th July

Have fun! :la:
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msbrit90's avatar
I have tried
to think of words 
that were coherent enough
for this poem

and which
you were probably
thinking as you read
"hmm..good try"

Forgive me
they were just words
so random of words 
and so pointless...but hey, I tried any way.   

Thumbs Up  lol 
KeyboardingChihuahua's avatar
I have flushed your poor goldfish
right down the toilet,
that were most likely belly up
for at least a good long month.

and which
you were probably
wondering whether you should check on dear Chippy and Golly
after being gone on that trip for what seemed like forever

Forgive me
they were smelly and rotten
so obvious that no one had fed them
and so obvious that they were dead.
Junk-Heart's avatar
I have been asleep for far too long
held prisoner by a world of dreams
that were of my own creation
though not what I intended

and which
you were probably
unaware of what lead us here, my selfish desire
to bask in the fire of my lovers ever burning flames

Forgive me
they were such tricksters, but I wanted to believe as I drank their elixir
so by the dusk of night & each dawning day we come so close yet still far away
and so you my rising sun forever to search in vain, while I your moon in my eternal slumber remain.
The-Lost-Hope's avatar
I have learned
well
that were brokenhearteds  
everywhere

and which
you were probably
unaware
of

Forgive me
they were begging
so much
and so sad
iAmoret's avatar
I have torn out
the stitches
that were binding
my mind

and which
you were probably
hoping
were the cure

Forgive me
they were pulling
so scratchy
and so fragile
Ag-Cat's avatar

I have beaten
all of the kids
that were bugging you
the other day

and which
you were probably
thinking I was violent
that I went overboard again

Forgive me
they were so rude to you
so fat
and so juicy

Jarret91's avatar
I have seen the pain of loss among the living.
The sense of sadness and tears
that were lingering inside the cold room,
where the grieving members stayed.

and which
you were probably
There to offer a warm and comforting hand to them.
One of whom is my father.

Forgive me
they were so many deaths throughout the past few years.
so many great people who and my family loved.
and so While they are partaking in the great rest above. We will never forget them and keep their memories alive, through our thoughts and our hearts.

Pardon me, this was the first time I ever did something like this. Yeah..alot of emotional baggage..
TraumaLizard137's avatar
I have dreamt of a life as a mother,
Raising the three demigods
that were distracting me from this madness you call society,
all ensnaring me with their intangible, unending loyalty.


And which
you were probably
Wondering, "Where has she gone? She's not out for days!"
I wallow fitfully in the moment, deep in slumber, dreaming away.


Forgive me
They were all that I've loved for the past 2 years
So very welcoming
And so viciously possessive.


I don't intend to win ^^;
I'm not sure if I manage to capture the gist of my dreams, but there you go! :dummy:
Kamal-Q's avatar
I have known
the silhouettes 
that were born in
loving duets

And which
You were probably
Thinking
I'd forget

Forgive me
They were temperate
So summery
and so delicate
PleasantlyEscaping's avatar
This one's my favorite :) it's beautiful!
Trencher7809's avatar
That one is really good!
Kamal-Q's avatar
Thanks much :)
Where's yours? 
Trencher7809's avatar
I never did this challenge, I don't really want to this time, don't know why.
KaizenKitty's avatar
I have reached for the moon and touched it
held the fury of suns in my palms
that were bruised and scarred and blistered
I have lost and I've fought and I've won.


And which
you were probably
dying to see, but I hid in the sock by your bed.
My mind wanders and trails empty crossroads


Forgive me.


They were better but I won instead.



so and so .
Grapeglowstickbaby's avatar
I have taken-up
the commandments 
that were carelessly
cast aside

and which
you were probably
slandering
right now

Forgive me
they were from God
so Merciful
and so Pure
Chezzy-Am's avatar
I have three little gifts
For you
that were meant for your
broken heart

and which
you were probably
not given until you read
these words bleeding out from me

Forgive me
they were not meant to be
so was it ordained
and so it is meant to be
KaizenKitty's avatar
beautiful -- passionate :clap: (rather different from the humorous responses I expected)
Chezzy-Am's avatar
:) Thanks. Stay blessed.
KdaAnimefan's avatar
I have seen your posts
that were likely well made

and which
you were probably
proud and happy of

Forgive me
they were among many
so unseen
and so thus unappreciated
lalaith913's avatar
I have prayed
countless lines
that were loud
upon your deaf ears

and which
you were probably
listening, in truth,
but turned away

Forgive me
they were all for you
so you wouldn't have to pray
and so have to remember your voice.