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February 17, 2013
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I need a love

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HanOneSail Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The Man Underneath the MaskDon't look into my eyes
A man coiled by shadows
Lives amongst full of lies

Minds filled with the ancient
Of the most magnificent
Dimensions across the magnet

We call the universe he does nothing
But just creating and attracting
Infinite amounts of aging

Dimensions from all longitudes
They have their entire altitudes
Ignored and are pulled by magnitudes

Possessing such forces beyond
The craziest unimaginable diamond
Shaped like a harmonious almond

Just because he knows the deep down
He does it because you are a sundown
A Universe that he wishes to be sown

To the core of his heart
For there is no rampart
That will keep him apart

From the


I feel like I am fading
From this life waning
As if a dying moth
Admiring its last cough

Watching a fiery passion
Wondering about life's lesson
Making the most out of it
They are artists lit

To dream out their own
Truest shades of renown
Precious visions from slumbers
Before they become numbers

Deaths burnt out of time
Never reaching the thyme
Whose existence is avast
The roots immortal they outlast

All laws and seek only to evolve
Ascend the deceased into a revive
Where they are in the essence
Linked with each other before their excrescence

Not fused but joined neither evil
Nor a bright light of righteous revel
Just as ice is during the winter
It is crystallized into a legendary arbiter

A title donned to the fated
All life that has been created
For though there is a creator
For though there is a corrupter

There are many more and now
The inferior may rise from below
The essence they believed was God
Just a seed animated thawed

To brush strides of shadows
From the showers of their powers
Even so the density of the bloomed
Is nothing but deviations of the presumed

The white spread calm ocean
Pure of good and bad a notion
That none could ever fathom
To be the origination of their han

Read these two poems I just wrote... I not sure if the second one should end here or go on.
It is important to me, otherwise I wouldn't post them in a forum.
I just need to know how people feel.
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3wyl Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
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:iconokimono:
Someone Exciting and possibly adventurous. but in order to find these kinds of people you have to get out. ALOT
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:iconokimono:
sounds like you want new love with plenty twists and turns. it also sounds like you want/need someone with an upbeat and energetic personality
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HanOneSail Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Indeed :\
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HanOneSail Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
precisely
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:icondutchconnaisseur:
I haven't got a clue what you want. This probably belongs to your journal.
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HanOneSail Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Maybe, but I want people to discuss what they think it means I guess.
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siantjudas Feb 17, 2013   Digital Artist
So you don't even know what you're after by posting this?

No wonder you're not finding anyone if you can't even have a clear and confident purpose when making a simple post.
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:iconpakaku:
But then it's not help-with-life material
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