1. Try to add some different color tones, shading and such. 2. A bit more detail wouldnt hurt 3. You might try experimenting with a differnt medium, that generally helps me out.
There's the option when submitting a deviation to have a note to viewers that says you encourage critiques. You can post your artwork in the Deviation Thumbshare forum and ask for critiques.
The more people you manage to bring to your userpage and the most chances you have to get some critic. Plus as =nokari said there's the option where you can choose what kind of critic you want to receive for your artworks. FAQ #300:What does Critique Preference mean, and how can I change it?
And as this is not related to the Art Scene I'll lock this now
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