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Composition Help

:icondeliquesce-flux:
Deliquesce-Flux Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Professional Photographer
Hello fellow photographers! :)

Need some composition help with this photograph. I feel like there is something off but I can't quite place my finger on what. It's been driving me nuts all day. Help?



Thank you so much!
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:iconbronyjoe:
bronyjoe Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
In my personal opinion I think it needs one of two things:

Something in the center to fill up that gap, filling up the final third
OR
Just have the picture with the dog(s) on one side side, I've often found (and been told by many people much better than I) that photographs an often look good if there is something on just one side of the frame, but It never works if there is a subject on both sides but nothing in the middle.

Also, I find the extremely bright background and the tree quite distracting, but then that could be due to how there's nothing in the middle so my eye is immediately being drawn to that bright area

Hope this helps :)
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:icondeliquesce-flux:
Deliquesce-Flux Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Professional Photographer
Thank you so much! That was extremely helpful, I appreciate it :)
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:iconyangosplat:
yangosplat Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
As others have said, the tree brings the eye to the right dog; in addition, if it were not for the tree, it would be very hard for your eye to "decide" which dog is the subject; it is better to have one place where the eye is drawn, like moving them closer together as one subject.
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:icondeliquesce-flux:
Deliquesce-Flux Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Professional Photographer
Thank you very much!
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:iconyangosplat:
yangosplat Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
You're welcome. :)
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:iconoutback-art:
OutBack-Art Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Professional Photographer
But good photo.
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:icondeliquesce-flux:
Deliquesce-Flux Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Professional Photographer
Thank you so much!
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:iconoutback-art:
OutBack-Art Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Professional Photographer
Your welcome!
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OutBack-Art Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Professional Photographer
Your foreground is off as well as your background. The depth-of-field is also off. If you can see what I see in the middle, the faces of both dogs are off blur, meaning the are blurry. Also the faces are over exposed a touch, there is a good distance between the dogs. I will download this and edit the way I think it should look and show you what I'm talking about.
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:icondeliquesce-flux:
Deliquesce-Flux Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Professional Photographer
Off blur on the dogs? In full resolution, the faces are very sharp, especially eyes. I agree about the rest though, thank you very much! I appreciate it! :)
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:iconoutback-art:
OutBack-Art Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Professional Photographer
Your very welcome! You see I cannot zoom into this image on dA, so that's why I saw it as blurry.
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:icondeliquesce-flux:
Deliquesce-Flux Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Professional Photographer
It's okay! Thank you for your help, it was definitely needed :heart:
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:iconoutback-art:
OutBack-Art Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Professional Photographer
Your very welcome! :D
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:icondeliquesce-flux:
Deliquesce-Flux Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Professional Photographer
:heart:
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:iconoutback-art:
OutBack-Art Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Professional Photographer
:hug:
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:iconcourtneywilliams:
CourtneyWilliams Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Professional Photographer
In my opinion I would have to say the space between the dogs and the angles of their faces, because they are not looking at you straight on, both of them it kind of distorts the image.

For me my eyes are kind of driven in all directions trying to make eye contact with both of them at the same time; where as if they where both straight on it wouldnt do that.

If you know what I mean?

Maybe its just me xD
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:icondeliquesce-flux:
Deliquesce-Flux Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Professional Photographer
Thank you! I appreciate it :)
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:iconrockstarvanity:
RockstarVanity Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013   Photographer
I don't know that it's the composition as much as the brightness of the background. Because there's a space in the middle and that area of the image is super-bright, that's where the eye is drawn to but there isn't anything there.  If that makes sense :)
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:icondeliquesce-flux:
Deliquesce-Flux Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Professional Photographer
That does make sense, thank you so much!
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:iconklutz80:
Klutz80 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this photo! The only thing that I dislike is the difference of the angles of the dogs. I think the picture would've been even better had the left dog been looking at the camera the same way the right dog is. Keep up the great work!!
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:icondeliquesce-flux:
Deliquesce-Flux Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Professional Photographer
Thank you very much! After looking at it a few times, I completely agree :)
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:iconklutz80:
Klutz80 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
no problem! Happy that I could help a bit.
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:icondeliquesce-flux:
Deliquesce-Flux Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Professional Photographer
You sure did! Thank you :)
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:iconklutz80:
Klutz80 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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:iconexiledseraph6:
ExiledSeraph6 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Only you can truly know what the photo is missing. However, composition-wise what you have is symmetrical-- which tends to be bland. If the dogs could be posed in a way that created variety (such as one laying on ground next to the other sitting up) it may prove to be more dynamic and lively.
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:icondeliquesce-flux:
Deliquesce-Flux Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Professional Photographer
Thank you! I can see how that is, I appreciate your opinion :)
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:iconsecondclaw:
secondclaw Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013
In this particular case, assuming you have control of the dogs, you should:
1. Move to a position where you don't have bright light behind the dogs (a neutral gray or green is better - still light but not bright). This would also fix the tree issue.
2. Get the dogs closer together. Too much negative space in the middle is bad. At least if negative space was on the side, you could still crop.

But ...
1. Great detail on the faces, and a catch light in the eyes.
2. Good low-to-the-ground vantage point.
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:icondeliquesce-flux:
Deliquesce-Flux Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Professional Photographer
Thank you! I appreciate the critique immensely, very helpful!
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:iconmisterharts:
MisterHarts Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Professional Photographer
Id bring down some of the greens, Whats happening here is your eye is going directly to the brightest colors the dogs really dont have much color on them so in a way your eyes is focusing on the part that isnt focused. Id try to desat the greans a bit and add a bit more contrast to the dogs. here something like this [link] i did it a bit quick just to give u the idea of what i mean let me know if this helps

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Harts Ortiz
www.hartbasscompany.com
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:icondeliquesce-flux:
Deliquesce-Flux Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Professional Photographer
That definitely helps, thank you very much for the example!
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:iconmisterharts:
MisterHarts Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Professional Photographer
np :-)
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:icondeliquesce-flux:
Deliquesce-Flux Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Professional Photographer
:)
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:iconkintarotpc:
Kintarotpc Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I think if you cropped it so the space between each dog's head and the end of the frame is equal, it might feel better. You could also bring them closer together by just cutting out some of the empty space in the middle and blend it together since the background is basically just out of focus blobs. It'd be not too hard. No blades of grass or such to deal with.
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:icondeliquesce-flux:
Deliquesce-Flux Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Professional Photographer
Thank you! That makes sense to me, I will definitely be trying that out!
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:iconchelliusbee:
Chelliusbee Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I'd say the spacing between the dogs. There's empty space in between the 2 subjects but in all honestly, it's still a really lovely photography! :)
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:icondeliquesce-flux:
Deliquesce-Flux Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Professional Photographer
Thank you so much!
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:iconhalomoon:
halomoon Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Maybe its the dogs, i think maybe they have to be closer together. And the left dog maybe needs to face the camera a little more.
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:icondeliquesce-flux:
Deliquesce-Flux Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Professional Photographer
Thank you so much! I will definitely be keeping that in mind :)
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:iconpeachesrox:
peachesrox Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Student Digital Artist
personally I think its the spacing
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:icondeliquesce-flux:
Deliquesce-Flux Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Professional Photographer
Thank you!
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:iconpeachesrox:
peachesrox Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Student Digital Artist
your welcome :)
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:icondeliquesce-flux:
Deliquesce-Flux Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Professional Photographer
:)
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:iconevanxethtideswell:
EvanXethTideswell Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
very good shot but i also think the tree in the background is distracting :) but besides that very nice.
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:icondeliquesce-flux:
Deliquesce-Flux Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Professional Photographer
Thank you very much!
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:iconroonoceros:
Roonoceros Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I think it's lovely, but it may be the distance between the dogs' heads.
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:icondeliquesce-flux:
Deliquesce-Flux Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Professional Photographer
Thank you!
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:iconhedwards:
hedwards Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013
The only problem is the tree sticking out of the dog's head. The dog where the eye immediately goes to. But, I'm not sure it's really a problem in this case as there is a natural line around that dogs head.

Now, if you intended for both dogs to be the subject or the other dog to be the subject, I suppose that would be compositionally wrong. The white on black contrast of the nose on the right dog is just too much of a draw to the eye.
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:icondeliquesce-flux:
Deliquesce-Flux Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Professional Photographer
Thank you very much! I appreciate you taking the time to critique this piece.
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:iconanniecanjump:
anniecanjump Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013
I am not a photographer but from an artists' point of view, the one thing that I notice is the tree in the background, behind the one dog's head, I find it very distracting. And perhaps the spacing of the dogs. But it is a very nice photograph. Lovely dogs.
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rockTheSky Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
hah, that's interesting. I never noticed that until I read your comment here.
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