Deviant Login Shop
 Join deviantART for FREE Take the Tour

Details

Closed to new replies
January 5, 2013
Link

Statistics

Replies: 4

my first 5 minute routine Stand up comedian. I need your opinion.

:iconofficialpoypoy:
Officialpoypoy Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013  Student General Artist
do you think these topics are interesting?

My first 5 minute routine consists of


* how wolverine gloves are made safe for kids to use it the blades are rounded so it looks like gloves with triple dildos.

its motion activated too... so the harder you clench the better it feels.

technically its still a toy ;)



* how I have a portrait of a black guy smiling in my screenlock for my phone to scare away robbers... unless their black.

white kid: hmmm.... Im ganna steal his cellphone.
OH SHIT ITS A BLACK GUY!
*throws cellphone*



* one direction condoms. how your girlfriend is sucking a dickhead on the head of your dick.
how it would be awkward if the condom plays one direction music while having a blowjob.



Do you think its interesting?

of course itll sound way funnier when I perform it with the voice and pauses and tone and body language.

Do you think Ill get some laughs?
Reply

Devious Comments

:iconnamenotrequired:
namenotrequired Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Student Interface Designer
If you're looking for critique on literature please use the Monthly Critique Thread to the top of this forum, or if you just want to promote it or get general feedback feel free to use the Thumbshare forum for this :) Don't forget to post it as a deviation first.

Reply
:iconagent-sarah:
Agent-Sarah Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You REALLY need to learn how to do comedy right because that was just awful.
Reply
:iconmerrak:
merrak Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013  Hobbyist
>> Do you think its interesting?

No.

>> Do you think Ill get some laughs?

Depends on the audience and delivery.
Reply
:iconsaartha:
saartha Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No.
Reply
Add a Comment: