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Y DOSE EVERYONE HATE MY BOOK?? PLS ANSER :(

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sarahjaderoseblood Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
ive spent so much time on my book andi tink its rly good but evryone hates it!!!!! plus dey keep hating on me for no reasin!!!!1 pls help!!
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BeccaJS Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013   Writer
:lock:

This would be better suited to your journal and not in the forums. Please check out the forum rules and forum stickies before posting again.

Thank you :)
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stoppingeternity Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow you remind me of that chick who wrote My Immortal. Are you twins or something?
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fyoot Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013   Writer
metatroll. meh
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sarahjaderoseblood Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
?
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InvaderLiz-TheCat Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I already told you earlier today, but I'll just repeat it again.
And if you cant handle critism, don't ask for it. If you want to edit it, I would just simply start over. Why? Here is a list:

~ Details are used to make things easier to picture and give them a good, gloomy, hateful, or joyful mood. You do not have good details, and the story seems too short. For example, in chapter one, you said;
"I awoke with a jolt. 'It was that dream again..." I thought. I shoved my blankets off and streched."
How to help it
-Describe how the character feels instead of a simple "I awoke with a jolt" You could use this:
"I suddenly woke up from a dangerous nightmare. It felt so real...almost like an omen, or prophecy. It always surprised me. "Why does it keep following me, that dream?" I said to myself. A few seconds later I ignored it and just did my normal routine. Strech, comb your hair. etc."

~ Grammar makes a story look MUCH better. Of course, you'd never get your literature published if you had so many grammar mistakes. If you don't yet, spell check and revise your grammar before you submit it to deviantart. (This is a big thing to me, because sometimes I can be a Grammar Nazi) Just some quick things. Apostraphies ( ' ) always go before the "s" only when you are talking about someone owning an object, with the exception of "it" Its=Possesion of an item It's=It is. Apostraphies need to be used with words like you're, it's, aren't, etc.
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EchoInTheVoid Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Student Writer
I hate to say this, but I attempted to have some sympathy for you, but I keep reading each of your caps lock rages and I just laugh. A tip, quit using text talk such as den (I hope it was text talk) and just looking at each of your comments I can tell you have some grammar issues which is understandable, but when you post a forum "Why doesn't anyone like my book?" expect some criticism, quit getting infuriated by someone who is just trying to help. Take into consideration the next handful of people that will give you reasons as to why your book is not the greatest piece in the world, don't get angry.
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DorianHarper Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Writer
I had written out in the critique I left you for your first chapter reasons that probably lead to it, mainly which are grammar/spelling/punctuation related. If those aspects were cleaned up both in your stories and your responses to people as a whole, people would take you more seriously and then perhaps appreciate your attempts at your work more.
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PatiCakee Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
You probably wrote that shit in 10 mins, all of it.
The story line is rubbish, no one likes a merry sue character, you cant spell, you dont use grammar, you dont use full sentences, your characters are shit, you cant write, you have no good plot, no one can understand what on earth is going except the fact people are hitting on your merry sue girl.

We hate you for a reason so stop denying the facts you attention whore, no one in their right mind will help you. You created this hell for yourself so now you have to suffer this hell.
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Lytrigian Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I think we can safely assume this isn't for real. Perhaps someone is trying to emulate the success of "My Immortal".
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DorianHarper Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Writer
Ohhhh she's certainly trying :stare:
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sarahjaderoseblood Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
-___- i am so fuking sick of dis
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Lytrigian Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
*I
*fucking
*this.
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Hurricaneclaw Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
nope
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sarahjaderoseblood Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
wat
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LivanaTCD Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
I like it...
Did I forget to say that I love to read horrible (fan)fiction?
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sarahjaderoseblood Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
STFU AND ITS NOT EVEN FANFIC
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LivanaTCD Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
See? Even when someone likes to read your stuff you go in capslock-rage.
I said (((((fan))))) fiction. I mean both fanfiction and just fiction.
To be honest, yesterday I dicided to write something while I was drunk and that is even better than what you write.

Love your works, please keep going.
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Co-Phantom Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
There must be a reason to it. I'd say your grammar might be one. :I
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sarahjaderoseblood Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
MY GRAMMER IS FINE
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Tales-of-Haven Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
*!
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Co-Phantom Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
No. :V
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NakuraXchann Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
If you don't like CC, then don't write or change the way you write.
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sarahjaderoseblood Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
WTF IS CC
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Steeltalon Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
Constructive criticism. Which is what you got from that published author. It's meant to help you improve your spelling, grammar, sentence structure, and your writing overall.

And you bashed him for it.
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sarahjaderoseblood Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
U DUMASS I SED THX TO HIM FUKR
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Steeltalon Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
And then you went and offended him. By, you know, saying your mother had died from cancer.

See how everything comes back to bite you?
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sarahjaderoseblood Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
my mom did dye u hartless bich
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Steeltalon Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
Your ex posted a comment fifteen minutes after you made the journal stating that she was fine and had just "served you cookies".

If your mother had really died, I would be more sympathetic. As it stands, you're nothing but a fake little girl, crying wolf just because you can. When you say something truthful at long last, no one will believe you.
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Steeltalon Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
You can't handle constructive criticism, on either your art OR your writing. Don't like being told where you can improve? Stop writing. Because people will ALWAYS point out where you fuck up.
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sarahjaderoseblood Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
STFU IM BETER DEN U
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Steeltalon Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
Prove it.
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sarahjaderoseblood Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
I ALREDDY HAV
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Steeltalon Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
I haven't seen one shred of proof that you have.
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