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Advice what i can do with this idea

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UnitedSymbol Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012   Writer
They chase us. Evey last one of us. 1000. 1000 we began with in 1816. Now we are left with fifty. They have this list, created by this evil New Orleans witch that grows every time we try to feed or turn someone. It has our location. It has out where abouts. It is impossible to live with them chasing us. We can not enjoy our immortality with them chasing us. Some of us even call them immortal. But they really are not. Were tired of running. Were tired of the stress. Were dying. Ever so quickly. We are the last 50 in the world. Once they rip the guts out of all of us. We are finished. Done for.

Extinct.

We will Fight. We will die. We will survive.


Thats the descreption on my Wattpad
how do you like what could i do with it??????
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fyoot Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012   Writer
You could i dunno have it printed on lavatory paper?
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SaraAlaska Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't know seems okay but if you're using that as a description alone no. Just no sorry but that's the sort of thing you put on top, and then space and then explain like who the person is, what has happened. Also it sounds like something that would began in the prologue like you said when their running in the blizzard.

Although you said you want the readers to read it to find out what they are, warn you now don't go to long leaving that as a mystery because they'll lose interest and want understand.

Like people said the New Orlean witch thing is very common but to be honest a lot of the things were books take place are. And there is reason for that because of the back story of the city and people its only logical that a witch is from New Orleans and not somewhere in Montana. But maybe she's from New Orleans but doesn't live there at the moment? Maybe she lives in a smaller more unknown city outside of it?

Also you said you're a wattpad writer and I wanna hug you now because I think you're the only wattpad writer I've known of that I've seen of these forums and I must ask for your wattpad username, I'll fan you. :) Because I'd like to read the story when you're writing it and I'll do the feedback thing-ing lol I write on Wattpad although not very known at all. Not at all. O_O

Good luck! :)
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UnitedSymbol Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012   Writer
oh the witch lives in Romania hahaha1 Oh sure it's JadenSherriff hahaha i tried to make it as diffrent as possible actually i am actually almost fineshed with the first chapter! :D thank you so much! I am not known that much either but i still post!
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SaraAlaska Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ooooh okay, by reading everything it looked like she was from New Orleans, Romania sounds cool though although I haven't done much research on it, I think theres a lot of wereolf stories from there. I don't know. O_o

Thats cool! lol :) I just fanned you! ^-^ lol XD If anytime need anything and you're not sure about it don't be afraid to message me, I always reply back and happy to help people. lol ^-^
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UnitedSymbol Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012   Writer
Yeah she is from New Orleans but lives in Romania in a castle with the Chasers.
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SaraAlaska Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thats pretty interesting! lol
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UnitedSymbol Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012   Writer
yeah that's going to be in first chapter after the vampires kill the people in the cave
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vglory Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012
New Orleans witch = cliche. You don;t even hint as to who the endangered people are. So I can't say I am very intrigued.
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UnitedSymbol Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012   Writer
she is white though so yeah lol
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vglory Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
Of course she is, that is part of the post Anne Rice New Orleans witch cliche.

But my main point was: who are these people? Chupacabras?
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UnitedSymbol Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012   Writer
vampires hahaha i wanted people to read so they can find out
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vglory Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012
So you Anne Rice style new Orleans white witch is involved with vampires.

That could have been more unexpected.
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fyoot Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012   Writer
<3
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UnitedSymbol Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012   Writer
yeah
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UnitedSymbol Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012   Writer
what do you mean ik cliched lol!
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tiganusi Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Professional
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raspil Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012   Writer
this is a description of what you want to write? just write the story and come back later with a finished product. we can't do anything with a description.
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schris91 Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Student Filmographer
Why do we have to say this to so many people? Ugh.
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raspil Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012   Writer
long answer = because they're afraid of failure and even potential failure. if enough people like their idea, that must AUTOMATICALLY MEAN what they write will also be liked. however, this is not how it works and they have not learned this at this juncture in their writing journey.

short answer = n00bs

(yeah, i'm a little tired of it, too)
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schris91 Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Student Filmographer
Yeah pretty much sums it up. I had a screenwriting teacher who pushed me to do those things and it was the best advice I'd ever had. People should just be happy anyone's trying to help at all. Oh well watcha gonna do.
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raspil Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012   Writer
watcha gonna do.

that is my motto in life.

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schris91 Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Student Filmographer
And ain't it a great way to live?
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Hurricaneclaw Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Write it =P This seems more of a summary than a description. We don't get that much information from it other than the fact that there used to be 1000 of something and now there are 50, and are being chased by a New Orleans witch. So, not much.
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PinkyMcCoversong Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Writer
I think this belongs in the critique thread.
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UnitedSymbol Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012   Writer
oh there are one of those oops! :D
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Rovanna Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012   Digital Artist
Are you asking for critique on the synopsis itself? :U
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UnitedSymbol Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012   Writer
sorta both to see like what would you do with that idea and how do you like it. :D
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Rovanna Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012   Digital Artist
Seems fine. Reckon you should just write the story, cos people can't really judge it based on an idea alone.
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UnitedSymbol Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012   Writer
yeah. I mean i dont know what to do with it like how to start it off. I know i want to start it off with the vampires running in a snowy blizzard and yeah thats it i suck at description so i need the help with that
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Rovanna Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012   Digital Artist
Have you written a plan for the story?

As for description, try googling it and looking in books you like to see how they describe things.
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UnitedSymbol Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012   Writer
yeah i sorta know like the main battles and what happens at the end but thats pretty much it lol
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Rovanna Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012   Digital Artist
If you're stuck with starting, you may want to try writing out a more detailed plan.
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UnitedSymbol Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012   Writer
true! Thanks!!!!!!!!!!!
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