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If their blood gives so much power, why are they all being killed? Wouldn't it make so much more sense to keep them all alive so they can regularly harvest the blood? It seems kind of silly and impractical to kill them all.
DevilKid-chanFeatured By OwnerNov 27, 2012Hobbyist General Artist
I'm afraid this forum thread might get locked in a minute You should try using the critique forum, that's where people are supposed to go for feedback on their literature. On the other hand, your story sounds quite interesting, I hope you succeed with it