Actually, this story would be better suited in Job offers. Despite your good intentions, its still advertising for you to get income.
And I don't know if peps really have short attention spans. Homestuck as the Ulysees of the internet seems a bigger challenge then reading this thing. Though you might try to keep it short just in case.
I don't believe for a second that you don't need schooling. While you don't have to go to an expesive dance class and graduate with a degree, you can take classes and still learn to dance. There alot of artist who did got to school for some education background and there are some who didn't. Im thinking also, back then, we can't learn totally by ourself. At one point, we learned through a masters/servant, and groups of peoples.
Have you looked for free dance lessons? They have them in parks around here. Also at some events, and the colleges sometimes have one-off or week long classes that are open to anyone. I'm sure you could find tons of resources online, or you could just try dancing.
I know you're young, but I just wanted to say for future reference if you're doing something like this (asking for commissions to fund a certain cause), don't spend a bunch of time explaining your life story. People on the internet have short attention spans. All you really needed to say was "I'm fourteen, my family doesn't have a lot of money, I'd love to learn to dance, if you buy my art the money will go towards my dance classes". The life story thing works well on tv because people are already invested in the story. On the internet, imagine everyone's going "Yes, and?". Write for that audience.
Okay thank you! I know it was super long and probably really boring it's just I know that on the internet majority of people think that short stories are big lies and don't care so I really wanted to prove my point that I can't afford it without help. But I will remember your advice!