Looking really promising. I love the hair, her new body is great, not totally sold on her face, but I think you have a lot of time to make it better, plus its not even done yet. How old is she supposed to be? Because I am seeing an older lady, and I think it's because of the hairstyle and her jaw/mouth. Her nose is also really unique, which can be good and bad. Great emotion though, I can get the mood and it makes me wonder what's making him upset, which is amazing for a WIP. Keep up the good work!!
Oh wow, thank you so much! I'm glad you noticed the nose, I wanted to give a bit of variety to their appearance Her hair's done up because they're at a funeral (which is why he's so upset- one of his best friends died)and they're both supposed to look around 18. What improvements could you give for her face? I wanted to show that she's trying to stay strong for him but she's on the verge of breaking in the same way that he is.
Uhm, the mouth has some lines coming down, and while they do convey emotion they also register as wrinkles. It's looking good, keep pushing yourself, try to replicate the detail in the hair in the entire drawing.
Oh wow, thank you so much for taking the time to do that! It really helped with the posture of her back. I've been super busy lately which is why it's taken me so long to reply, but I'll get around to following that asap- although, the redline puts them a little further apart than I'd like them to be. His knees are meant to be between hers and the dress is wrapping around them both The shoulder and shoe are two things that I hadn't considered, so thanks for correcting that!
I did this redline before I noticed that you had done a revision. In red I went over the movable masses and gesture. You did a decent job on this for the most part, although you can see I've corrected the heads a bit to be more fluid, although this is more of an aesthetic correction than an anatomical one. I also increased the size of the feet, which are far too small. My foot is the size of my forearm from wrist to elbow, not my hand. I understand exaggeration for stylistic effect, but you seem to be emphasizing the youthfulness of the figures, which would mean you should do their feet bigger, not smaller. In blue, I outlined the hair as a single mass. I think you're getting a bit bogged down in individual locks of hair and losing sight of the bigger picture. The hair looks almost like a wig, as if it's sitting on top of the head but not actually growing out of it. Try it again keeping in mind constantly the entire mass and its directionality as it leaves the head. Hair tends to grow and fall in big chunks, not many chaotic frizzes, so focus on the chunks before the frizzes. Figure out how they flow out of the scalp and where they fall. You have the same problem with a few fabric wrinkles, which I have outlined in purple. Think about what is causing these folds and why they are there. Folds are caused either by fabric draping over itself due to gravity, or a point stretching part of the fabric. Think about the origin of each of these folds and move or erase them accordingly. Finally, swatches are for posers. Color is relative. The only time swatches are even useful is for low budget cartoons or on a scene-by-scene basis of an animated feature to keep the color consistent. That's it. Even then, don't display your swatches. What's the point?
Anyway, good job for the most part, and I hope this was helpful.
Thanks for your comments! The swatches are only there so that I can keep track of what shade to lineart in, they're not gonna be use in the actual colouring Even so, I'd adjust the colour of the lineart to correspond with the lighting. They're there for the time being almost like notes, just as a reminder but they won't be visible for the final thing. The hair comments were really useful, I definitely saw what you meant with the boy's at least so I've redone it to make it look like the hair is growing in a certain direction. I've also given the fabric more of a texture, for example the boy's shirt has angled creases to show that it's a stiffer material, whereas the girl's dress flows for a softer look. Hope I did a good job of it!